I love how you described the characters in depth. Sunshine, lollipops, and rainbows... 02:56, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
Thanks! --Catherine 02:58, July 11, 2010 (UTC)
I edited the word "snickers" to sneakers. --Larry Young 20:32, July 15, 2010 (UTC)
Ah! An intimate tale. Didn't know you had made one. Lemme see...very descriptive. The plot didn't go anywhere yet, so can't comment on that. But the description give you a very good sense of the character and the world they inhabit. It doesn't dwell too long in a single subject, and it isn't too vague. Personally, I thought the main character was a bit too flawless for a long-term story (unless you count ready submission to authority as a flaw), but we'll not be sure of that until the story grows a bit. --Nonimportant 00:47, September 24, 2010 (UTC)