Talk:Project Alpha

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[edit] Plot

• The Job
  • Joseph Chase
  • The Job
  • Invasion 14:37, 16 May 2007 (UTC)
• The Assassin
  • The Assassin
  • Dilemma
  • Information 19:24, 17 May 2007 (UTC)
• The Rescue
  • The Set Up
  • Memory Wipe
  • Revenge 15:49, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
• Epilogue 16:18, 18 May 2007 (UTC)

Project lenght: novellas; hence the content page

Dhabih | talk 14:37, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

Memory Wipe? I started a story based around a memory wipe, and then a memory replacing. But the main theme of the story is identity, and determinism. Didn't read this one yet, so I don't know if they're alike, but working on it. --Nonimportant 16:10, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

Aw, that's not fair! I was going to make Harry Donovan a sleeper agent too! Apart from that, nice story, though I wished I could see signs that Chase cares about his girlfriend a little (He didn't think about her even for one second when he thought he was going to die!). --Nonimportant 16:27, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

You'll have to wait a bit, but you'll see why Chase is as nonchalent about his whole girlfriend issue in the third part - The rescue. I know the whole sleeper agent thing seems so cliché, but I think the plot itself is rather cool. Dhabih | talk 21:25, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

I HATE waiting to know what happens. Sometimes I read the ending of novels before I even reach the one hundred pages mark. So I'll make two educated guesses:

• She is the true villain behind it all, and was the one that memory-wiped him.
• Chase is a selfish guy, and only dated this girl because he somehow knew she would get that job, and thus, could help him get one too, the narrator likes Chase, so he wanted to make everyone think Chase is a nice guy. --Nonimportant 00:09, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

Nice guesses, but none quite true. Chase is the good guy, i'm not just trying to make him look good - actually, it just might be that I hate Natalie or i'm not too good at writting fiction that includes relationships of that sort... Dhabih | talk 17:07, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

I tried to add some emotional stuff to go along with the plot in the second part... what do you think? Still not enough? Maybe, but this is an espionage type story, no time for lovie-dovies. Dhabih | talk 19:47, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

Don't worry 'bout it, in fact, it's more than enough. It's just that, although they may be spies, assassins, psychos, "lovey-dovies", knights, barbarians, businessmen, housewives, and etcetera...characters are people too! They don't do things only to impress the reader with their wit and skill, they do things for their own motives, because of their own mood, to achieve their own goals. They couldn't care less about who's reading them.

So if Chase is an emotionless, ruthless killer, by all means, make him act like an emotionless, ruthless killer. But if he's being forced to act as an emotionless, ruthless killer, due to the circumstances, but is actually a compassionate man, then make him act like a compassionate man trying to be a emotionless, ruthless killer. --Nonimportant 23:22, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

Chase's character is niether black nor white, but rather in a grey area, as you may notice from the last part.

Also, I don't really feel too good about the ending and the epilogue, any suggestions? Dhabih | talk 16:18, 18 May 2007 (UTC)

I was talking about consistency, rather than being good or bad. For example, Chase was having serious doubts about killing just one man he barely heard of, but had no qualms killing about ten security guards that were once his friends (Maybe he could only knock them unconscious?).

The plot was kinda cool, although I could see some things coming a kilometre away (The second I glanced at the word "Memory Wipe", I knew that Chase had his childhood memories wiped). But I still could not understand how the memory-wiping machine gave Chase's memories back.

Since you're not satisfied with the ending, maybe it could have an epilogue? I'll add one. See if you'll like it. --Nonimportant 13:39, 19 May 2007 (UTC)

I thought that I did have an epilogue... maybe ill merge the two together.. and make it more consistant. Dhabih | talk 01:03, 20 May 2007 (UTC)

Oh, haven't seen it. bummer. Don't worry about merging, just delete mine. --Nonimportant 02:31, 20 May 2007 (UTC)