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- I really liked this work. It had a great set of ideas related to luck and unfairness, and the ending was very fitting. Not only was it literarily well written, but it also had a good sense of humor and was quite a unique piece of work on this site....
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I really appreciate your praise. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work!
If anyone's interested, I've made a rather bland PDF with this story in it. Download it here:
http://www.64digits.com/download.php?name=Mr_Fortunate.pdf&id=22937 --F1ak3r
The concept of luck is a thing to look into, and the story had a flow with I suppose at times felt repetitive but with changes to the formula. Short enough to survive such things. The main oddity I found was the point of Fortunate being a pessimist. His actions of lacking fear seemed to be an optimistic origin. While the oddly placed things can be attributed to his luck, his remembering Fredrick from flipping a coin seemed half odd, and may of been more suitable of Fredrick had explained the story just as/just after Fortunate flips a coin. Overall it'd of been nice if the middle had been kept a little shorter, since the final chapters and the first chapter were what I felt the best partsUser:Serprex 05:43, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
I agree. Also, what was the reason behind the flowing water at the end? It seems like the symbology could be changed a bit. 01:56, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
The water... The water was a trick. Richard played the sound of water to get Mr Fortunate to come to him. But I forgot to say that in the story.<ln>@Serprex: I often worried about Mr Fortunate's pessimism. I don't know if it makes sense, but here's an explanation: Mr Fortunate's words & thoughts are pessimistic in nature, but his actions often stem from subconscious optimism. I'll write something detailing that into the story a little later.<ln>As for the flow, I agree with you. The middle is a bit too drawn out.<ln>I'll work on this story, and put my revisions up on Sunday.
I like your style, your writing style, I mean, and am already devising ways of plagiating it so subtly that no one will notice. Specially the first chapter, emphasizing the vagueness of where the story is, and the ironical endng. The only possible problem I've noticed is narrator and the characters seem to have awfully short memories, like how Mr. Fortunate seems to think his luck is about to run out at first, but is absolutely confident in his luck when he flips the coin, or when the narrator says Fortunate never considered taking the revenge but then says "or did he think that he deserved whatever punishment was waiting for him". At any rate, wish I had read this sooner. --Nonimportant 23:05, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
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I'm glad you like my writing style. I like it too ^_^.
And yes, the memory thing is true. I suppose it's because I wrote one chapter every few weeks for a while, and didn't really refer back enough, or think about the series as a whole. The chapters, I feel, were a bit too independent.
F1ak3r 10:55, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
I think conflict is in the heart of being human. A person so lucky that is constantly in the fear of his luck's running out, will be very confident at one point and very pessimist in the following. Back and forth, back and forth. Also, is it really lucky when it seems so? So lucky in minor things that unhappy with no friends in the major league. Is it luck really?
Acungil 17 January 2008
I think that sums up what I was trying to say in this story. Thanks.
F1ak3r 10:08, 20 January 2008 (UTC)