Sometimes it's a bore being the only creative person in a creative writing site. Snowy wasn't about the perversion as obviously as this one. Looks like the modernization was dropped for perversion, but oh well, I can't dislike a story that has the sentence "Damn right, no one! Bitch, y'all better pack up yo' show 'fore Lillian goes crazy black woman on yo' narra' ass!" and the writing style is almost perfect, as usual within your stories. --Nonimportant 15:34, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Why thank you. I was writing this at maybe 7 in the morning, with a bloody headache/cold...so...yeah. After reading Snowy I thought I'd take a shot at modernizing a fairytale. --Fythring 17:38, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Kinda blunt,which is kinda what the story implies.The random mortal kombat stuff was kinda uncalled for,but made me get less comfy in the reading flow.The wolf died pretty fast,but I guess that works.What really doesn't make sense is that you totally ignore the fact that her ankle has been hacked.But whatevUser:Serprex 19:41, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Mortal Kombat scene: yes. I know.
Wolf's death: You're right.
Her ankle: not really, she only started to hack at her ankle, with the strength equal to, say, wiping a finger on your leg. The wolf burst through before she was actually gonna start cutting deeply.
--Fythring 20:02, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Ah,I thought I read about it hitting bone and allUser:Serprex 20:05, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
By the "bone", I meant the thing between the foot and the ankle...y'know, the protruding little hump thingy. --Fythring 20:10, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Perhaps you can make that more clear? I also assumed she had hit her leg bone. Still, she didn't really do a whole lot of movement between the time she cut into herself and the end, so whether or not she did any damage isn't really relevent. And, since when was the wolf rabid? I was kind of hoping it was going to kill more people >.> The "Saw" reference made me laugh, along with the whole "Dollarama Made In China" font being the actual font/format they use. As I said over MSN, I was hoping the wolf would get a "crazy ol' black woman asswuppin'" instead of death, nonetheless... very funny and perfect style. I, personally, enjoy perverted things *oh my, what an effing shock!* so this was great for me to read. I have a hard time reading something that ISN'T perverted now, too boring. Now "Wish I Had An Angel" only makes me laugh. All 4 parts -yes, including part 3- are funny to me and don't bother me in the least now (maybe just the whole continued rape thing in part 3, it kinda went from morbidly sick to... "Holy fucking christ I wish I had never been born" sick) Boy that was long, and I still have more to say about the story! ♪PyroSprite♪
Put your explanation into the story in the form of expository. 23:41, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
Ya,surrealism shouldn't be overused for a categoryUser:Serprex 01:32, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
Given Literary 
, Novelty 
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- I'll be the first to say that it's perverted, but it's still developed to an extent and has some black humor....
Given Literary , Novelty by David
- Nice story and funny too....