Talk:I Love Teri
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What's this, rehashing the same thing over and over again? 00:42, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
Oh, I thought I'd rewrite it as a narrative. You can delete the other version. --Christianguy 1990 00:47, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
Yep. In my humble (and yet, strangely, sometimes considered) opinion, this is better than the poetry form. --Nonimportant 02:08, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
Thank you. --Christianguy 1990 22:09, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
Sorry, I forgot to log in again. I wrote more on this. --Christianguy 1990 06:16, 13 May 2007 (UTC)
How is this story coming along? May I ask? --Christianguy 1990 02:36, 14 May 2007 (UTC)
Yes, you may.
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Just kidding. It's coming along nice, but you should either introduce new things or finish the story in two or three chapters. Nothing against it, but "I love you." "I love you too." "We seriously love each other foo'!" can get repetitive over time. Also, dialogues are cool, but use the narrator voice a little bit too. --Nonimportant 02:56, 14 May 2007 (UTC)
What do you about the trip into space, and what do you think of the Frau der Sterne? --Christianguy 1990 22:11, 14 May 2007 (UTC)
Given Literary insight 
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- Interesting how everything just turns out 'right'. However, it also makes it painfully obvious that this work is faked, as in a lack of realism in the way it's written. Another equivocal mark is its use of repetition....
The whole story is boring and unattractive!--69.51.160.98 15:01, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
Thank you for your honest opinion. Now, did you know that the IP of 69.51.160.98 is a Class A address and that the default subnet mask is 255.0.0.0? --Enterprise-G 23:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
And another thing . . . What was with me and lines? They were annoying. --Enterprise-G 23:23, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
I think I told you that. But oh well, livin' and learning. But don't be put down by every comment, think of it as an encouragement to use what worked and cut down what didn't. Also, you could make use of your grittier and edgier self to write a "realist" piece of work. Preferably with guns in it. Many guns. And knives. --Nonimportant 02:01, 11 April 2008 (UTC)