Talk:Blue Romance

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I edited this page; I am sorry I forgot to log again. --Enterprise-G 14:01, 26 June 2007 (UTC)

Ya,that change was quite needed(I know I wouldn't revert)User:Serprex 14:29, 26 June 2007 (UTC)

Do you think this story is good? --Enterprise-G 21:34, 26 June 2007 (UTC)

Lot like The_Yroenian_Key's intro,and the structure doesn't really fit a short story I find.Descriptions don't matter that much,and text seemed too formal(I have that problem also).Otherwise,I found it to be kind of undeveloping(that wouldn't be an issue if it didn't seem it was trying to)User:Serprex 01:18, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

I agree and there are too many run on sentences that could be divided up into 2 or 3 sentences. Needs a good workshop before submitting anywhere. WayneRay 15:19, 28 November 2007 (UTC)WayneRay